The Hills Have Eyes
Mardi 20 avril 2010|
IMDB rating: 6.40 Plot: While traveling in a trailer through the desert to California, the retired detective Big Bob Carter stops in an isolated gas station with his family for fueling and rest. Bob is traveling with his wife Ethel, his son Bobby, his daughters Brenda and Lynn and his son-in-law and Lynn’s husband Doug and their daughter baby Katy. When they leave the gas station, the owner advises Bob to stay in the main road. However, the stubborn driver takes a shortcut through a nuclear testing site and wrecks his station wagon. With the family stranded in the middle of nowhere, Bob and Doug walk on the road trying to find some help. Bob is captured by an insane and sadistic member of a deranged evil family that lives nearby the spot. Doug returns to the trailer, and along the night the Carter family is attacked by a group of psychotic cannibal criminals. Absolutely trapped by the murderers, they have to fight to survive. |
Actors: Houston Robert,Speer Martin,Grieve Russ,Steadman John,Whitworth James,Gordon Lance,Berryman Michael,Locke Peter,Horror,Thriller,
Can someone proof read my essay and change up the grammar please.?
Im in grade 8 and i need help with my essay; its the first big one so i don’t want to mess please. We had to track are time for two weeks: the first week we had to just do what we regularly do and the second week we had to change and do thing more differently.
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Time Tracking Assignment
This time tracking assignment showed me how to use my time wisely and more productively. I saw were I was wasting valuable time and how to improve it. This past two weeks I realized were I could have been finishing homework I was wasting it on facebook and texting. The first week opened my eyes I thought I was not doing much important thing such as homework and house chores but when I added up the hole thing I only did about 5 hours a week all together and I was spending 3 hours a day on facebook and talking on the phone now I see why I’m getting 73% in math; facebook is a big distraction for teens every time I go on my lap top I want to go one facebook to find out who’s dating who and what the latest gossip. If I spend as much time on my homework as I do on facebook id probably be a A- student. Something that stood out to me the most was the lack of exercise I got; I thought I was a very active girl walking home every day, not taking the bus, and eating healthy but that was not the case I only got half an hour a day that’s nothing compared to my goal. Looking at my schedule I have a lot of free time, everyday when I came home I wondered way the afternoon went so fast but the hole time I was watching TV I didn’t even keep track of the time. The second week was way different from the first I kept track of the time; I made a list of what I had to accomplish in a day and my goals that I would like to start in terms of my health and my personal life. The most enormous change was the time I spent on my homework and my goals that I wanted to start. I felt like I was getting more accomplished and I didn’t fell like I was failing behind on anything. Every Saturday I usually look back at any work that I needed to finish like homework finishing my chores and just thing in general. But i had nothing to do; that was a very good felling because I didn’t have to worry about anything. Something that got in the way was facebook and msn I didn’t go on it as much as the week before but an hour an a half is still a lot just by commenting one peoples pictures and writing on peoples pages. I’m not sure how I’m going to use facebook less but at least its not as long as the week before. Another distraction was TV i needed to watch my favourite show like 90210 every Tuesday and The Hills I guess its ok to watch few hour a day of television but it fells like if I stop watching TV I wont see all those commercial on how your suppose to look I wont care as much about the way i look and just care if I’m healthy. Who really cares if I can fit in to a size zero now its about about being healthy; your comment on running or doing some kind of fiscal activity a day to be healthy and not do it because you want to lose weight since you’ll gain the weight back anyways, really stuck in my head and now every time I exercise I’ll do it for my health. Ok so things i will change:No more than an hour a day for facebook, more time for homework and important things. My goal is to run 3 times a week or do some kind of exercise that get my heart pumping. I want to take more classes to prepare me for post-secondary and helps me get in the university i would like to get into. I also want to look up some scholarship out of Canada. This project really helped me use my time more wisely and productively I should put more time into things that are more important.
that’s not long enough
tobi is a good boy! | Feb 01, 2010
Goodness, I got through 4 sentences and this is what I found. If I feel up to it I’ll do more, ok hun?
Sentence 2: Where not were
Sentence 3: THESE, not this
WHEN, not were
Sentence 4: SEMICOLON (;) after eyes
MANY, not much
Add an S to Thing
Comma after Chores
WHOLE, not hole
Alot of the mistakes are repeats, so just go through them.
*It mustve taken you a while to type, so email me and I’ll help you
phooey | Feb 01, 2010
Where are your paragraphs its seems like its more of a journal entry than and essay but than again it seems like you are just going back and forth on things and not organized maybe make an outline those seems to help me more on my essays. hope that helps;)
Tiffany | Feb 01, 2010
Look for CAPITALIZED corrections.
This time tracking assignment showed me how to use my time wisely and more productively. I saw WHERE I was wasting valuable time and how to improve it. IN THESE past two weeks, I realized THAT I could have been finishing homework INSTEAD OF wasting MY TIME on Facebook and texting. The first week opened my eyes. I thought I was USING MY TIME WISELY on homework and house chores, but when I added up the WHOLE thing, I REALIZED THAT I only SPENT about 5 hours a week ON HOMEWORK AND CHORES and THAT I was spending 3 hours a day on Facebook and talking on the phone. Now I see why I’m getting 73% in math. Facebook is a big distraction for teens. Every time I go on my lap top I want to ACCESS Facebook to find out who’s dating who and what the latest gossip IS. If I spend as much time on my homework as I do on facebook I’d probably be a A- student. WHAT stood out FOR me the most was the lack of exercise I WAS GETTING. I thought I was a very active girl, walking home every day, not taking the bus, and eating healthy but that was not the case. I only got half an hour a day OF EXERCISE WHICH IS nothing compared to my goal. Looking at my schedule I have a lot of free time. Everyday when I came home I wondered WHY the afternoon went so fast, but the WHOLE time I was watching TV I WASN’T even keeping track of the time. The second week was way different from the first. I kept track of the time, I made a list of what I had to accomplish in a day, and I FOCUSED ON THE goals that I would like to start in terms of my health and my personal life. The most enormous change was the time I spent on my homework and my goals that I wanted to start TO ACCOMPLISH. I felt like I was getting more accomplished, and I didn’t FEEL like I was FALLING behind on anything. Every Saturday I USED TO look back at any work that I needed to finish, like homework, finishing my chores, and just thing in general. But NOW I HAVE nothing to finish. THIS IS a very good FEELING because I DON’T have to worry about anything. Something that got in the way was Facebook and MSN ….
whew I’m tired…..
hole = a hole in the ground
whole = read the whole thing. eat the whole (entire) thing.
mary_g71 | Feb 01, 2010
First of all you need to get your priorities straight! And second you need to know that in life you have to rely on nobody but yourself! So the sooner you know that the better off you will be in this life!
TONI D | Feb 01, 2010
Time Tracking Assignment
This time tracking assignment showed me how to use my time wisely and more productively. I saw where I was wasting valuable time, and how to improve it. These past two weeks I realized when I could have been finishing homework, I was wasting time on facebook and texting. The first week opened my eyes. I thought I was not doing many important things such as homework and house chores, but when I added up the whole thing I only did about 5 hours a week. I found I was spending 3 hours a day between facebook and talking on the phone-now I see why I’m getting 73% in math. Facebook is a big distraction for teens, especially me. Every time I go on my laptop I want to go on facebook to find out who’s dating who and what the latest gossip is. If I spend as much time on my homework as I do on facebook I would probably be a A- student. Something that stood out to me the most was the lack of exercise I got. I thought I was a very active girl walking home every day, not taking the bus, and eating healthy but that was not the case. I only got half an hour a day of exercise-that’s nothing compared to my goal. Looking at my schedule I notice I have a lot of free time. Everyday when I came home I wondered why the afternoon went so fast, but the whole time I was watching TV. The second week was way different from the first; I made a list of what I had to accomplish in a day and my goals that I would like to start in terms of my health and personal life. The most enormous change was the time I spent on my homework and goals I want to get to. I felt like I was getting more accomplished and I didn’t fell like I was falling behind on anything. Every Saturday I usually look back at any work that I needed to finish such as homework, finishing my chores, and just things in general. But I had nothing to do, and that was a very good feeling because I didn’t have to worry about anything. Something that got in the way before was facebook and msn. I didn’t go on it as much as the week before, but an hour an a half is still a lot just commenting on peoples pictures and pages. I’m not sure how I’m going to use facebook less but at least its not as much as the week before. Another big distraction was TV. I felt I needed to watch my favourite show like 90210 every Tuesday and The Hills. I guess its ok to watch few hours a day of television but if I stop watching TV I wont see all those commercials on how your supposed to look. I wont care as much about the way I look and just care if I’m healthy. Who really cares if I can fit in to a size zero now? Its about about being healthy not my size. Your comment on running or doing some kind of physical activity a day to be healthy, and not because you want to lose weight since you’ll gain the weight back anyways, really stuck in my head and now every time I exercise I’ll do it for my health. Things I will change: No more than an hour a day for facebook, more time for homework and things important to me. My goal is to run 3 times a week, or do some kind of exercise that gets my heart pumping. I want to take more classes to prepare me for post-secondary and helps me get accepted at the university I would like to get into. I also want to look up some scholarships out of Canada. This project really helped me use my time more wisely and productively I will put more time into things that are more important.
You might want to consider using different paragraphs for the two weeks and what you noticed, unless the teacher wanted you to just do one big paragraph. You should also capitalize Facebook and MSN.
me | Feb 01, 2010
This time tracking assignment showed me how to use my time wisely and more productively. I saw were<WHERE I was wasting valuable time and how to improve it. This past two weeks I realized were<WHEREI could have been finishing homework, BUT I was wasting TIME on Facebook and texting. The first week opened my eyes. I thought I was doing MANY important thingS such as homework and house chores COMMA but when I added up the Whole thing COMMA I SAW THAT I only did about FIVE hours a week ALTOGETHER. I was spending THREE hours a day on facebook and talking on the phone. Now I see why I’m getting 73% in math. facebook is a big distraction for teens. Every time I go on my lap top I want to go on facebook to find out who’s dating who and what IS the latest gossip. If I spenT as much time on my homework as I do on Facebook COMMA I WOULD probably be a A- student. Something that stood out to me the most was the lack of exercise I got. I thought I was a very active girl walking home every day, not taking the bus, and eating healthy COMMA but that was not the case. I only got half an hour OF EXERCISE a day. That’s nothing compared to my goal. Looking at my schedule COMMA I SEE THAT I have a lot of free time. Every day when I came home COMMA I wondered way the afternoon went so fast COMMA but the Whole time I was watching TV I didn’t even keep track of the time. The second week was way different from the first. I kept track of the time; I made a list of what I had to accomplish in a day and my goals that I would like to start in terms of my health and my personal life. The most enormous change was the time I spent on my homework and my goals that I wanted to start. I felt like I was getting more accomplished and I didn’t FEEL like I was failing FALLING behind on anything. Every Saturday I usually look back at any work that I needed to finish like homework COMMA finishing my chores COMMA and just thingS in general. But i had nothing to do ON SATURDAY. That was a very good felling FEELING because I didn’t have to worry about anything. Something that got in the way was Facebook and MSN. I didn’t go on it as much as the week before COMMA but an hour an a half is still a lot TO SPEND just commenting one ON people’s pictures and writing on people’s pages. I’m not sure how I’m going to use Facebook less COMMA but at least it’s not as long as the week before. Another distraction was TV i needed to watch my favourite show like 90210 every Tuesday and The Hills I guess its OKAY to watch few hour a day of television but it fells FEELS like if I stop watching TV I won’t see all those commercialS on how you’RE supposeD to look. I won’t care as much about the way I look and I’LL just care if I’m healthy. Who really cares if I can fit in to INTO a size zero?It’s about being healthy. Your comment on running or doing some kind of fiscal PHYSICAL activity a day to be healthy and not do it because you want to lose weight since you’ll gain the weight back anyway, really stuck in my head COMMA and now every time I exercise I’ll do it for my health. OKAY, so THESE ARE things i will change: No more than an hour a day for Facebook, AND more time for homework and important things. My goal is to run 3 times a week or do some kind of exercise that getS my heart pumping. I want to take more classes to prepare me for post-secondary and help me get in the university i would like to get into. I also want to look up some scholarshipS out of Canada. This project really helped me use my time more wisely and productively. I should put more time into things that are more important.
I think you wrote a good essay, but I found lots of areas needing correction. It’s tough to do here, without being able to use color, so I tried caps for the corrections.
Here are some things you need to watch out for:
were and where….two different words. Were is the past tense of are; where is an adverb similar to there (that’s how I always used to remember the difference).
You omitted apostrophes in many words, such as it’s (meaning it is), I’ll (I will), you’ll (you will). Every contraction (combination of two words) needs an apostrophe where a letter is missing.
Into is one word.
Facebook and MSN need to be capitalized because they’re proper nouns.
Fiscal is a word having to do with finances; physical is the word you needed to use.
Fell is the past tense of fall, so felling really isn’t a word. Feeling is what you meant.
You wrote one (1) a couple of times when you meant on.
We dig a hole in the ground; whole means ‘entire.’
Next time you write an essay, try reading it slowly out loud to yourself. Where you naturally pause is the place that you need punctuation … usually a comma or a period.
I hope you’ll send this to me again after you fix it, so that I can make sure you understood my corrections.
Best wishes to you. 
Shandeeka68 | Feb 01, 2010
